Story Synopsis - Three Act Structure (Feedback and Self-Evaluation)

Feedback

Is the problem established enough at the beginning?

Make the context clearer at the beginning

Running down a lane – doesn't know where the lane is this shows she is running from something.

Keep it remote – too many people around her not helping could be seen as unauthentic.

How is tension being created within the scene?

How is suspense being created?

What can be made without dialogue to create tension?

                He could put's music on – strange music?

                She could be looking at cuts on her arms or something?

Build tension before she gets in

                Moving from a frantic situation to

·         Cars beep to get her out of the way (T)

·         Car that drives past – is rude to her calls her a druggy (T)

·         She gets K.O (T)

·         Feet come towards her (S)

·         Feet stop and person crouches down gives a drink (S)

·         Doesn't talk (S)

·         Keep it eerie (S)

·         He help's her up (T)

·         Takes her into the back seat and makes her comfortable (representations through blankets/seat-belts etc) (T)

·         He gets in the car and drives (S)

(T) Tension and (S) Suspense

When she regains consciousnesses in the car, put some music on – country music (Annoying music) (T)

Symbolism

The smoking lighter thing in the car, close-up? Red = danger etc.

Idea change from moving the dialogue to visual action to build more tension (Marilyn Milgrim)          

Try to avoid flashbacks in shorts there isn't enough time.

Resolution – where do they get to?

Each step needs to raise the stakes of eeriness (Three step structure).

The start happens in the ‘magic hour’  (Magic Hour = The sun hasn't quite set but the street lights are on). 

How are we hooked into it?

She is clearly distressed.

How she appears?

Her costume hair makeup etc.

Oppositional Forces 

No one wants to give her a ride, then the central part were she receives help isn't real help. She seems to be saved but has she? Encode that she hasn't really arrived at safety.

More themes

Freedom and imprisonment

Loneliness

Abduction

Safety vs threat

Effective time space and unity

Plenty of scope for developing mood

Q. Have we really covered predicament and dilemma together?

Q. How does the conflict really build up?

Location Scouting

Due to the type of mood within the film this needs to be addressed early.