Story Synopsis - Draft 3 Evaluation

Make the argument more dramatic and raise the stakes by adding in violence, fighting, outrageous body movements - make it seem ape-like and almost uncomfortable to watch. The argument should include lots of hand fluttering about and when she struggles and tries to manoeuvre past the guy to get back in the car, he should push her away from the car and she comes running back to hit him and he punches her so hard that she falls unconscious and he drives off quickly.

When Guy 1 and the Girl first speak, he should say 'home?' rather than 'i can take you home.' this makes him seem illiterate and maybe makes him vulnerable to the audience as they could interpret it as shy, however it is also very creepy and therefore raising suspicions as well as tension. 

Leave the 'boot' scene till later so that he can stop in a random road and say 'just a second' as this builds tension for the girl (close-ups of her hands as she awaits his return).

When he gets back into the car, don't make the 'seat-belt' issue vicious/violent as we want to keep it creepy in an obscure way rather than a sexual way, as if he just assumes that he can do that then it creates a different meaning to his character. Let the audience create their own suspicions.

"Are you forgetting something?" - Man

"What?" - Girl

"Your belt." - Man